Comments : Her Caffeinated Shadow

  • 1 week ago

    by hiraeth

    love this!

    • 1 week ago

      by Star

      thank you :)

  • 1 week ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I am BEYOND excited to finally comment on this (with my coffee in hand!). I read it when you first posted it and audibly muttered "What!". The title is unique, and I feel like you've done this before, where you take two words that usually wouldn't be seen together (or two ideas), and mold them together. The way you personified this shadow from start to finish made this poem stand out even more, and I just love how, from the title, I knew this would be like nothing I'd read before.

    What I took away from this is that even in our tears, there is still something that awakens inside of us. Maybe a desire to escape, to have a taste of what it's like to travel and get away from everything we know. Or maybe the open seas and fluffy clouds signified eternal rest, or this "fantasy" land, where there is no more bad in the world. I took the caffeinated part as both literal, and as having a spirit that is yearning for more adventure, pulling at us even when we simply want to rest.

    My favorite lines:

    "this time he approached
    the deaf side of the night,
    the side where I wept,"

    ^ The most poetic lines in my opinion! I also liked that, a few stanzas below, "but no one listened" was on its own separate line.

    LOVE this <3

    • 1 week ago

      by Star

      I was really unsure with how I felt about this poem, you made me feel good about it! Thank you ^_^

  • 6 days ago

    by Brenda

    Beautiful ! Congrats on your win, well deserved-

    • 6 days ago

      by Star

      Thank you Brenda <3