Comments : we must sail against the winds

  • 8 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I have to say, this is brilliant. The language, the descriptions used and the alliteration throughout paint such a damning picture. Such a relevant piece of poetry, so perfectly and originally executed. Nominated.

  • 8 months ago

    by Star

    I love this the form, the wording and how powerful it is, everything about it speaks volumes. Truly amazing!!

  • 8 months ago

    by Everlasting

    You know? This is what came to my mind as I read the ending...

    “Nope, cockroaches will thrive! Those cockroaches are something else.”

    Interesting poem

  • 8 months ago

    by Michael

    Mr D, - deforestation, forest fires and ice caps melting, so sad what mankind has/is doing to our beautiful world. We don't deserve it, we really don't!
    Such depth to this piece, gives me a sad but familiar feel about our world.
    .. as for parasites that is what we are indeed!
    Great piece of work fella.
    M :)

    • 8 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Excellent, Michael, truly. Well done.

  • 8 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    Congratulations Michael <3

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Hello there Mr, I'm sorry I missed this one.. How I'm not so sure. Firstly, I'd like to congratulate you on your front page :) Secondly, I'd like to say if this wasn't on the front page and I wasn't highly interested in your work and obvs hadn't missed this then I'd have been intrigued by the title of this as it called to me that even in the saddest of times we must pick ourselves up and disy ourselves off because we have people to prove wrong, maybe I'm dead wrong but just my first thought with the title.
    The actual content of this is astounding with extremely vivid content.
    Well done,
    Em

  • 8 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Congratulatins on your win!
    This is excellent. It has a powerful message on global warming, deforestation, forest fires and what humans are doing to the earth. Brilliant!

  • 8 months ago

    by Michael

    Congratulations Mr D on a great piece :)

  • 8 months ago

    by cassie hughes

    A vivid and powerful write which really hammers home the message that we need to start looking after this planet and that ending is just wonderful. Congratulations on a very well deserved win.

  • 7 months ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow, what amazing structure this poem has and I live your layout and the way you include things like stuttering the word stutter etc, it made the whole poem very suspenseful as if you were telling us a story and we had to keep reading on to find out more.

    Great way to create a message, one which we all hear every day but sometimes it takes imagery like this to hit it home how much we have failed as a species and need to change our ways - even just begin to observe what is happening in our world.

    I could totally see this piece being narrated over an advert - with David Attonboroughs voice!!

    • 7 months ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks, Saffie. I wrote this after watching Sir David Attenborough. I just hope we can all change our ways in time for our planet.