I saw English sonnet and thought that perhaps this was an iambic Tetrameter sonnet. To my surprised, it wasn’t. However, it was a pleasant surprised because this sonnet was a joy to read. I specially like the ending couplet. I agree with it.
Hello Mr D,
The title got me thinking and I wondered if this was about a wish or something as I've always grown up believing that if you make a wish then blow the seeds of the dandelion your wish would come true, eventually (even if it never did) and I've always told my nieces/nephews this too; I guess a little magic goes a very long way doesn't it? As ever this is an excellent sonnet from you but the ending is absolutely brilliant, it gave me goosebumps and reminds me of a quote I saw last week... "Don't ruin a new day by thinking about yesterday, let it go" as I believe the 'ghost' in sentence represents a person's past as it can definitely haunt us if we are 'given space and time' to think about it. I for one can certainly relate to this.
Thanks for reading and leaving as thought provoking comment. This poem is about having an ex lover haunting your mind. X
3 years ago
by Ben Pickard
A stunning sonnet, Michael. One of the best couplets I have ever read by anyone.
"A femme fatale dances" - not quite sure, but I think that might lose the meter there. That's just how I hear it. Anyway, wonderful.
Thanks, Ben. 'A femme fatale' replaced 'a temptress' the word Temptress is trochee, right? It may be how I'm hearing the French words. To me, they sound ok. Either way, I like your input as you know your sonnet stuff!
The alliterative lines in this, the unique phrasing, and the nostalgia of that lost love are phenomenal. The last two lines are some of the best, and kind of solidified the idea of being part of a process, growing, losing, then growing again. Congrats on the win!