Comments : where the dandelions grow (English sonnet)

  • 4 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I saw English sonnet and thought that perhaps this was an iambic Tetrameter sonnet. To my surprised, it wasn’t. However, it was a pleasant surprised because this sonnet was a joy to read. I specially like the ending couplet. I agree with it.

    • 4 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Lol - I do still intend on writing one, but this was already in draft for. Watch this space. What are your thoughts on 'a femme fatale' trochee or iambic?

    • 4 years ago

      by Everlasting


      My English pronunciation is the worst but I usually look at the dictionary for reassurance. The dictionary has it as

      femme faTALE <—- this word is anapest meaning unstressed unstressed stressed

      In my opinion, since it’s basically the starting of the line, it creates a weak iambic. But I would take it as iambic, that’s just me.

      a FEMME faTALE

      https://www.dictionary.com/browse/femme-fatale#

  • 4 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, what a cool sonnet! Totally different direction and subject than I am used to reading in sonnet form. Loved it!

    • 4 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Hi, Brenda. Thanks for this. You know how I like to be different! Lol

  • 4 years ago

    by Michael

    A lovely English sonnet Mr D. Along with wonderful imagery.
    Well done fella. M :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Excellent English Sonnet! I loved reading it, and the ryhming was brilliant in it.

    • 4 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks Keira. I very much look forward to one from you. Your last poem was not too different from a sonnet.

  • 4 years ago

    by Em

    Hello Mr D,
    The title got me thinking and I wondered if this was about a wish or something as I've always grown up believing that if you make a wish then blow the seeds of the dandelion your wish would come true, eventually (even if it never did) and I've always told my nieces/nephews this too; I guess a little magic goes a very long way doesn't it? As ever this is an excellent sonnet from you but the ending is absolutely brilliant, it gave me goosebumps and reminds me of a quote I saw last week... "Don't ruin a new day by thinking about yesterday, let it go" as I believe the 'ghost' in sentence represents a person's past as it can definitely haunt us if we are 'given space and time' to think about it. I for one can certainly relate to this.
    Best wishes.
    Em x

    • 4 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks for reading and leaving as thought provoking comment. This poem is about having an ex lover haunting your mind. X

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A stunning sonnet, Michael. One of the best couplets I have ever read by anyone.
    "A femme fatale dances" - not quite sure, but I think that might lose the meter there. That's just how I hear it. Anyway, wonderful.

    • 4 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks, Ben. 'A femme fatale' replaced 'a temptress' the word Temptress is trochee, right? It may be how I'm hearing the French words. To me, they sound ok. Either way, I like your input as you know your sonnet stuff!

  • 4 years ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations on your win! This was a super cool write!

  • 4 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Congratulations on your win!

  • 4 years ago

    by Jane Do-Re-Mi

    In dusty books are pinned my butterflies
    A catalogue of skewered strangled screams.
    Why do they interrupt and make me cry
    Reminding me of valleys ever green?

    I don't know why I've chosen to highlight these lines but there was just something about them that I particularly liked.

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    The alliterative lines in this, the unique phrasing, and the nostalgia of that lost love are phenomenal. The last two lines are some of the best, and kind of solidified the idea of being part of a process, growing, losing, then growing again. Congrats on the win!

  • 4 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Congrats on the win. Glad to see this in the front page.

  • 4 years ago

    by Maher

    "..until
    Corruption melts away like winter’s snow"

    This, my friend, is a line. Your whole piece is great, but that is the line that caught me. It has enough weight to sink the sun.

    Great write :)

    • 4 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you so much. I hope you are well.