Comments : Lose you now

  • 6 months ago

    by Em

    Hello Brenda,
    The title "losing you now" could be about losing some through death, moving or simply just parting ways though it's a tough call really as it's so 'loosely' used and I say the term in a really good way as there's many interpretations for this depending on what the reader feels and probably the readers emotional state too.

    You joke to me;
    "Trade me in
    for a newer model."
    ^
    This is a heartwrenching beginning as trading anyone or anything in for a' newer model' could potentially be the death of them but it happens all too often, I know alot of people jest about this for they've grown old together and could not see a life without the other in it, which is such a beautiful sentiment and these people know that the other is joking but does it not feel a little bit like a kick in the gut? I think it would to me though I have to say I am a really sensitive soul.

    I would sooner
    rip out
    my own heart
    than to
    lose you now...
    ^
    I think this is what I was getting at in my ramblings of my comment on the grist stanza, it would hurt to lose that person when you've spent so long together, wouldn't it? I'm certain and 'losing them now' sjiutd to me that you've been together for quite some time and that neither of you are as young ad you use to be so it would be like 'having to start all over again.' Hopefully, that makes sense.

    You are my lifeline
    in this cruel world-
    the balm
    that healed
    my broken soul-
    a continual note
    that plays
    a tune
    that only I can hear
    ^
    I love this stanza. It shows just how much this person has done for you and how much they truly mean to you which is why it would be difficult to 'lose them now' or at all, heaven forbid hut unfortunately, such is life.

    I truly began
    to live-
    to love-
    when you came
    into my life
    So there will be no
    "trading you in"
    no losing you-
    for losing you
    would be the end
    of me
    ^
    Again, these last two stanzas show that this person (I assume your husband) means one hell of a lot to you. A remarkable piece.
    Take care,
    Much love,
    Em x

    • 6 months ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much for your indepth comments. It was wonderful to read your take and thoughts. He's always joking to trade him in, something he knows I would never do, lol. I finally got it right with him.

  • 6 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A lovely tribute to who is obviously the love of your life.

    All the very best as ever, Brenda

    • 6 months ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Ben. He truly is....

  • 6 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I could be that 'newer model', I have fewer miles on my shiny clock... but I know, I could never compete with your quality man. All the best to both of you! X

    • 6 months ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Michael! He knows he's stuck with me forever! Thank you for the offer though lol

  • 6 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    Dear Brenda,
    I remember we talked about this a tiny bit when we were in the Bus station bathroom a few years back ( I miss you) and you and I both have been blessed to find our true love's - My love says this to me as well and I would never trade in the other half of me... love you! This is beautiful <3

    • 6 months ago

      by Brenda

      Awww, my friend, thank you! Yes, we did talk about this. We truly are blessed to find our forever. I miss you so much too...one day things won't be so crazy.

  • 6 months ago

    by Everlasting

    I love the sentiment and the flow of this poem. It’s so honest. Thank you!

    • 6 months ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much!

  • 6 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    When you have found true love you can never imagine a world without them. They are a part of everything even the breath you breath. A lovely tribute to the love of your life Milly x

    • 6 months ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Milly! Yes, he truly is that person.