Comments : Sweet Girl

  • 3 months ago

    by Maher

    "When the hand that touched you broke you
    And the fire inside you withered away
    Your smile went with it"

    Nicely written overall, but this part stood out most. I think most of us at some point wish we were how we used to be. The way you brought that feeling out is great.

    Thanks for sharing :)

    • 3 months ago

      by Jessica L.

      Thank you so much for the kind feedback. Sometimes I wish life had a rewind button but then I suppose we need life's rollercoasters to evolve and grow. Thanks for reading :-)

  • 3 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    This is beautifully written, if not sad. Truly lovely with wonderful description and wording.
    Welcome to poems and quotes!

    • 3 months ago

      by Jessica L.

      Thank you so very much! I used to post on here when I was younger but I haven't written anything in several years and decided to pick it back up. I appreciate the kind words and feedback!

  • 3 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    That simple question of "Where are you sweet girl?" is heartbreaking. I think so many things, so many traumas, can change us in life. It can seem impossible to find our way back to that open air, that light, where we are more sure of our footing. Where we feel a spark and curiosity for life again. Depression and mental illness too make it seem like there is no hope or way forward, even if we're fighting and trying to cope, but others can't see it. This really resonated with me, especially thinking back to certain years as a teenager, back when I was playful and carefree, and how years later, it was like I became a different person. I didn't even realize at the time it was depression.

    There's that yearning to go back to feeling like anything is possible, but perhaps knowing what we went through and continuing on is even more profound. Emotional piece.

    • 3 months ago

      by Jessica L.

      I love that poetry can be interpreted in so many different ways but sometimes people understand exact what you meant and felt when you wrote it. You hit the nail on the head and understood exactly the message I was trying to convey. I too went through a lot of trauma and struggled with depression and mental illness as a teenager, and that yearning to a time before when things were so much simpler and happier is always there. But I do agree that our growth and perseverance is everything and we only grow stronger. Thank you for your feedback and personal insight!

  • 3 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    A well deserved win!

  • 3 months ago

    by Maher

    Congrats on the win, well deserved! :)

    • 3 months ago

      by Jessica L.

      Thank you!! And thank you for the nomination! I was so surprised :-)

  • 3 months ago

    by Everlasting

    I like the repetition of “where are you sweet girl”? The most about this poem. Congratulations. Thanks for sharing.

  • 3 months ago

    by Star

    This is truly powerful!!
    Congratulation!

  • 3 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Well done you! Congratulations!

  • 2 months ago

    by Jack

    Great Job!