Comments : True Selves

  • 2 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Kinda beautiful also kinda sexy at the same time. Don't know if this is what you aimed for but if you did you did so impeccably

    • 2 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Thank you CJ
      It was the way it came out of me. maybe I am deprived and I don't know it.

  • 2 years ago

    by Hellon

    I got confused when I saw which category you have posted this because I thought it would be better in the love section It's quite sensual almost like tantric yoga and has a kind of hypnotic feel to it. Once slight suggestion I have is..

    To be satisfied
    by the satisfaction
    of the others,

    To find ourselves
    lost in the others,

    The other just doesn't sound right to me so, I'd either drop 'the' or replace it with 'each'.

    • 2 years ago

      by ddavidd

      the is gone
      thanks