Wonderful. The rhyme scheme was difficult to work out, but I eventually decided that it was:
AABBA AABC AABBAC.
It must have been extremely hard to write. I loved the repetition of rhyme throughout the poem and the thought of coming up with different words that all rhyme over and over.
I loved the imagery in the opening lines.
I long for you to be with me
like dew on grass at morning free
with sunshine rays above the hill
^^ the similie in this was really stunning to read, calming , with a beautiful picture. The idea of dew clinging to the grass in the way you cling to whoever you're describing in the poem was brilliant.
All of it was truly lovely. I really loved this :)
I took the liberty of re-writing the above cheer! I hope you do not mind me. Just trying to fixed some of the hiccups to make it sound smoother. But I’m displeased with my “fixed” as I feel I made it lose its emotion.
I longed for you to win this week
for poetry to sing yippee
You wrote a form like this with ease
now both of us are truly pleased
your win today has made me happy!