Comments : Glencoe (Haiku)

  • 5 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A beautiful place, Hellon. I went there aged eleven and saw a golden eagle. Thank you for reminding me of that with this perfectly detailed haiku.

    All the best,
    Ben

    • 5 months ago

      by Hellon

      It is a stunning place that is, sadly, also just a memory for me now.

  • 5 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I like the image here of Scottish heather. The word 'awaken' would the line flow better like this? awakens to misty moors?

    • 5 months ago

      by Hellon

      I did think about awakens but then settled on awaken because, although heather sounds singular here it grows in clumps with many heads and never as one flower so, although I would never say heathers in my mind it is more than one so, therefore, plural. I could be wrong but awaken just sounded right to me. Perhaps others could give their thoughts on this?

  • 5 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Perhaps 'awoken to misty moors'?
    Or, 'awoken by misty moors'?

    • 5 months ago

      by Hellon

      Perhaps this question needs to be posted in Luce's grammar threads haha!

      To me (no expert) awoken means that someone wakens you physically whereas awaken mean you wake by yourself but, honestly, I think the question arises from the word heather in this instance. As I said before heather grows in clumps, each with many flowers but it is never called heathers. I just don't know for sure though ????

    • 5 months ago

      by Hellon

      I've been thinking some more about this and have come up with this thought. If the word heather was replaced by cacti would awaken be acceptable?

  • 5 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    congratulations on this most visual piece.

  • 5 months ago

    by hiraeth

    Congrats!

  • 5 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Congratulations on this, this is absolutely beautiful. I'd love to see Scotland one day :)

  • 5 months ago

    by Everlasting

    Ohh haha if I hadn’t read one of your comments, I would have still think that by heather you were referring to a person. Silly me. Heather wasn’t capitalized, so, obviously, this piece wasn’t about a person. It’s about a plant. Lovely imagery. It makes me want to visit some day. . . To experience it physically rather than mentally.

    Congrats on the win!

  • 3 months ago

    by Rab

    Insteed o bangin oan aboot Cacti.......mention the Alexanber brithers....haha....