What a powerful write... Your closing was brilliant... thx for the read

This poem is fantastic! Sometimes a poem doesn't need to be long or detailed to have an impact. The imagery is stunning and the wordplay is perfect for the story you wanted to tell here.

This is well written and your choice of words made it like I'm watching this scene play out; and that's the beauty and power of it!

I love short poems for some reason. Wonderfully written.