awww that was really good. you really care about her and you showed that in your work. Kudos on your poem and love.

hey! i love your poem! its so good!!!!!!

Yes! A beautiful poem indeed Chris! You two are just lovely together, and I really hope things work out and you both get what you deserve,..each other. Good luck to you. Great Poem once again. Keep writing.

Luv, Jessica xx

IT'S AMAZING

this poem is really great, i loved it, and i know exactly how that feels, hope to read more of ur work soon, great job!!!

loved it! i gave it a 5/5!

This was great, absolutly beautiful. No complaints here!

Great job, 5/5... I only thought one thing, that maybe you didn't need the rhymes, perhaps try writing a poem like this without them... and it would help to use the 'enter' key a bit more, lol... but good job neways

That was very good. I liked the way it was a story telling poem, so I didn't get bored reading it. There is only one thing I would change about it, and that is that I would change it so that the lines are seperated. It gets a bit confusing when all the lines are together, so if you would seperate them it would be easier to read. Though i liked it this way too and i enjoyed reading it. Over all, it deserves 5/5!
SatuzKa

Your poem is great =) 5/5 for this!!
Keep up the good work.
Please check out my poems.
Take care, hugs

I'd hate to criticize a poem that holds so much emotion and meaning to you.

But.. I think it would make it easier for the reader if you put it into poetry format...

and it sounds like.. a flood of events and feelings... it was a bit difficult to keep track of everything while reading it.

but again, it's from your heart, so I guess that's good. Keep writing, and I hope you don't mind my comments.

very noble of you, great poem

Awesome poem man, its great. this is UnsentLetter from the chat that USED to be here. long time no see man. how you been? hope ur doing good. i'm going pretty well except for being stabbed in the neck at a party, but im all ok.see ya round man

UnsentLetter aka Ben

wow....very powerful poem....a little bit of form/organization would have made the reading MUCH easier. but job well done

christa//no motiv?

An amazing poem with so much emotion! Very well written as well! Check out my newest one is u would it's called "Walk on the beach" Thanx and Take Care! Brooke

Love the poem its really long and i told you i would vote and comment!!!

Wow thats a gr8 poem. ure a gr8 writer and u shod really keep it up

LUV LJ

No offense, but reading this was pretty hard on my eyes. I kind of skimmed through. Sorry.
But what I did get, I liked. The way your character put his friends before himself.. that was nice.
Maybe if you rewrote this into an easier-to-read format, more people could understand?

I really like this the emotion is wonderful.. however the format of it really does need to be worked on

AWWWWW.... this is great