The Tear

by Liam   Aug 6, 2004


As the days pass by,
since I last saw your smile.
A tear runs from me eye,
haven't spoke for a while.

The tear rolls down my face,
all the memories inside.
It begins to pick up pace.
The memories collide.

Just trying to hang on,
hope the tear doesn't fall.
Our relationship may fawn.
The tear begins to stall.

One last chance to make things work.
Before the memories crash to the floor.
Ive almost gone berserk...
The tear continues, the path well wore.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Leah20

    I Liked this poem, keep it up!

  • 19 years ago

    by dani

    wow thats well good email me if ya want 01085@dixonsctc.org.uk

  • 19 years ago

    by Marissa T

    i loved it and i wouldnt change a thing i give it a 5

  • 19 years ago

    by nikki

    great work, you're heaps talented, tops!

  • 19 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    very nice poem, Liam...

    I think you might want to do some rearranging though (when our ability to edit is returned) In stanza 2, you say that a tear rolls down your face and in stanza three, you are hoping it doesn't fall. ok, technically, I guess it could be a different tear, but you can easily flip those two stanzas... and in the first stanza you also say that a "tear runs from my eye" again, technically they could be different tears than the one that hasn't fallen yet...but you could change that line to say, "A tear wells up in my eye".... just something to think about...

    Great writing!

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