Unfinished Portrait

by TAinted vįŕťues   Aug 11, 2004


Frost clinging to my heart
Stopping me before I start
Taking me to the closet of my dreams
Where I don't want to go

An unfinished portrait
Claws at my soul
But I have to meet my fate
A this weight pulls at me

This portrait I must finish
Painting me with my own blood
Painting my own dreams
With my own screams

I look out of the window
I try to stop this flow
As I paint the person
I have become…

This dagger seduces me
This shining blade
Thirsty for my bitter blood
A way to save me before I fade

I paint this thing
For which I prayed
The scorpion's sting
The good that I betrayed

I try to finish this portrait
But my blood runs out
My dreams over…my screams choked out
As I finally die

This unfinished portrait
better remain unfinished
As the tempting blade
Lies buried in me…

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  • 19 years ago

    by Ş∂ņďħy∂

    You have great imagination. I liked the title, theme, i liked the idea in each stanza..but i felt all together there was something missing... May be the linking of each stanza was not appealing. I am not sure. YOu are talented. Please, don't take my comment in a negative sense. I will check some more poems of yours.
    Trincy.

  • 19 years ago

    by nikki

    so deep and dark, truly amazing.
    xnikkix

  • 19 years ago

    by Sarah

    Chilling, intense, provocative, and plain perfect! Gave this a 5! Bravo to you dear!

    Sarah

  • 19 years ago

    by vanessarrr

    dark and amazing. i enjoyed reading it. i liked the concept, the story. can't wait to read more of your poems! take care:)

    p.s. what's line 8?

  • 19 years ago

    by Nicole Kinder

    wow, thats really all i acn say is wow...i love it! this has got to be one of the best poems ive ever read! good job!

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