Brilliant poem MDN! :) I love reading yours because they are always filled with hope and love and faith - faith at the end that there is a chance for all of us - which is how I think God would have wanted his Word to be spread rather than fire and brimstone.
I liked at the end how you changed it to "their heaven".
WOW! I have truly felt this way on several occasions and I am so relieved that now I am in a church that does not judge me nor make me feel like I will never be allowed in heaven.
I love the message and storyline behind this. I love at how in the end you still rely upon Jesus and not all the hypocrates.
This is very powerful and emotional for me. I love the fact the you could still see the truth at the end of the dark cloudy day and trust upon Jesus to take you and even ask that HE show mercy on judgement day.
5/5. Finally a poet who understands the importance of rhythm with rhyme--I guess I shouldn't expect anything less from one of the greats on this site. I love the line "For those thirty pieces of silver, they say you and I can hold His hand"; it's such an effective criticism of the practice of indulgences and other similar institutions. Excellent work... is "keep it up" even necessary? Lol.
I like the repetition you used with the title it made it almost like song lyrics. So hard to distinguish between what is wrong and what is right in biblical terms. I say as long as your a good person and your not out commiting crimes and killing people you'll be okay haha or should be. Nice job as always 5/5
"They'll never let me into heaven, because I will only make it rain.."
I love this. You did an absolutly amazing write. Ive alwaysed believed in heaven and hell...tho in my eyes...its your creation. I never believed in "one" image of it. This poem was really touching. keep it up.
This poem had a lot of emotion in it for me. The desperation, saddness, hopelessness... but then also the acknowledgement, acceptance. My favorite line was:
They'll never let me into heaven, because I will only make it rain