My, my Lance, you are quite the poet. The sllables are off, but it flows well so meh, we can forgive you on that. Follow the rail, i like that.
Aken Sol

"I'll follow the rail.
Around the bend,"
for those two lines, I would suggest getting rid of the period after rail, so that it sorta is explained and completed by the next line. Hey I wouldn't worry about the syllables, not all poems need perfect syllables. I think the words you used in your rhymes were very true-to-life, and you did a great job expressing your pent up agony. My favorite lines were:
"My words are mapped,
But inside, they are trapped."
Because I know what you mean by that, it is just you put it so well.

mmmph ...good flow...but methinks uve used too much rhyming....so it sorta mars the otherwise wistful beauty of this piece...keep writing:)

ahhh, this must be love...

Good flow and good poem