that is good for your first poem!

I would expect nothing less from you for your first poem. I think it is amazing like the rest of yours a masterpeice.

Thank you very much for the Read Danielle, i always enjoy your poems and i always enjoy your comments, your a wonderful person and a great writer, every great writer has a great beginning.

My quote which i think suits this poem.

"The ultimate result of shielding man from the effects of folly is to people the world with fools. " - Herbert Spencer
(if you keep writing such great poems i am going to run out of people to quote. haha)

P.S. Five>>>

i think this is very good. i started writing poetry when i was about your age. probably around 13 or 14. so i can relate to how you feel in alot of your stuff. i was abused as a child, and my mother didnt believe me and stayed with my dad, and the state came in and put me in group homes. writing was my escape and my way of staying alive another day, it was a way to get the ugliness inside of me out, in a constructive way. check out some more of my stuff if you havent already, if you want.

Your first attempt was successful! Lol, but really I like it. I can relate