Comments : Bad Sex

  • 19 years ago

    by Eddie

    whoa, well hey you know ur a human and humans make mistakes. Thats life people makes mistakes now you can learn from them to make things better in the future. I liked this poem, well got to go.. oh and take care of urself.

  • 19 years ago

    by Josiah Larson

    Thanks, ya I know ppl are humans
    I am glad you like it!

    Once again thanks

  • 18 years ago

    by kayt

    good one jeba i love you and so does krissta you are like a big bro to me so yeah this is very creative

  • 18 years ago

    by Josiah Larson

    Thankz, hmmz little bro eh? :p

  • 18 years ago

    by Krissta

    good job honey i love you

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert

    I loved the way you conveyed the remorse in this poem very good. But the flow was abit choppy and in paragraph 7 I think mine-should be-mind and paragraph 11 was really hard to read but other then that I enjoyed it good job...

  • 18 years ago

    by Josiah Larson

    thanks =) I am glad you like it I did fix those things after I reread it a few times and noticed some things sounded better!

    Thankz

  • 18 years ago

    by undying blusher

    i think there may be a few minor mistakes, but well done. at least you realized what you'd done and it meant something...anyways, i like it.

  • 18 years ago

    by blackrose1011

    we all make mistakes bud, and the worst temptation is that of the flesh...
    as for the poem, spelling! please fix, i know mine is bad, but would it kill ya to hit the spell check button?
    I like this poem because of the emotion, however it needs work. I like the idea you displaying!

    ~Breeze

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert

    This was very choppy in reading and I saw some corrections that need to be made. I would advise you to edit this piece. On the Up side it was very heart felt and showed alot of remorse and emotion. The only thing it really lacked was a strong ending or closure I think with that you would have a hard hitting poem but nice attempt...

  • 18 years ago

    by J4Y

    was a different kind of poem, but was gooood!! yaz xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Kayla

    aww good job...so sad....very well done though...thanks for commenting on my poems by the way....luv yas mwah

    -kayla-

  • 18 years ago

    by Kayla

    aww good job...so sad....very well done though...thanks for commenting on my poems by the way....luv yas mwah

    -kayla-

  • 18 years ago

    by jess

    A bit confusin but on the overall good.
    great job! XxXxXxX

  • 18 years ago

    by Heather*-*

    Wow thats really good! i really like your poems, your actually the first guys poem i've actually read and really liked... well good job 5/5 from mee
    -Heather