An October Stroll

by ¤©h€€®ƒüll¥♥©¥ñ!c@l¤   Nov 24, 2004


Hey guys, i wrote this one for my english class, tell me what you think :oD comments are appreciated!

Strolling down this dark damp path
This brisk autumn night
With every breath I take,
I smell the scent of the rain
That surrounds me like an enclosed cage

Leaves express their unimaginative hues
As the full harvest moon shines bright
The ones that carpet the dirt road beneath me
And fill the trees that hover over,
That rustles with the harsh wind.

As I walk along this moonlit path
Abandoned except for me
The spirits of the dead is in the air
Strolling down this dark damp path
On all hallows eve

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  • 19 years ago

    by Jennie

    Thank you for that really nice comment you left me! You give me inspiration. I love this poem...everything is so vivid.

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "The ones that carpet the dirt road beneath me
    And fill the trees that hover over,
    That rustles with the harsh wind." this is a fragment of a sentence, and I'm not sure how I'm supposed to read it. Try reading it out loud... it seems awkward. I would probably change it to something like:
    "The ones that carpet the dirt road beneath me
    fill the trees that hover overhead.
    They rustle with the harsh wind."

    "As I walk along this moonlit path
    Abandoned except for me
    The spirits of the dead is in the air
    Strolling down this dark damp path
    On all hallows eve" the last sentence thingy is a fragment, and sounds sort of weird.. I would recommend making this stanza like this:
    "As I walk along this moonlit path,
    Abandoned except for me,
    The spirits of the dead are in the air.
    I stroll down this dark damp path
    On All Hallows eve."

    good poem

  • 19 years ago

    by nandini

    hey good one. keep it up

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