thank you so much for acctually rating my poems....i luv all of urs....i gave this one a five!!

its okies dokies

I see here that you are trying to refine your style here. Your keep the sharpness and twists and turns but I think that you have over did it here. You toned that great eye for sharpness down a little too much and the subject matter and mood suffered. I suggest that you buy a book on style and structure for poems. There are terms and devices that you used in poetry that if you looked into them I think would help you a great deal. Keep writing you have a great raw talent!

wat the hells with ur "intelligent" wordin i hav no idea wat u mean .Im onli 13....and i think my style of writins preety gud

janine style is hot and dont bag it out or i will get my mates on to ya

great poem!! nicely written!! keep it up!! and thanks for thre comment!!