You've Won

by Brittany   Dec 23, 2004


I couldn't go with you,
I was grounded you see
But that doesn't give you a reason,
to cheat on me

Not only with my friends,
but some of my best
It's your fault we're fighting,
You can be such a pest

You said you felt bad,
but you did it anyway
What about my friends?
Did they have any say?

Now I'm lying in the hospital,
I've had too many pills
You've made me feel like crap,
and also really ill

You want me to forgive you,
after all you've done
I don't know why I agree,
but again you have won...

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  • 19 years ago

    by Lucy

    i think this is a good poem, but i think, do you like critisism? if you dont just tell me...but it seemed like in this poem you put a lot of focus in trying to rhym, rather then trying to express your true thought...rhyming should be your last worry, just think about words that will enhance your thoughts and make it like it was straight from your heart and soul, where it all started, good job other wise...Lee

  • 19 years ago

    by Lucy

    i think this is a good poem, but i think, do you like critisism? if you dont just tell me...but it seemed like in this poem you put a lot of focus in trying to rhym, rather then trying to express your true thought...rhyming should be your last worry, just think about words that will enhance your thoughts and make it like it was straight from your heart and soul, where it all started, good job other wise...Lee

  • 19 years ago

    by Sinister Soire

    aww thats sad, did this really happen, your a good writer keep it up

  • 19 years ago

    by Jesse Lafferty

    You can write! I’d like see more of your work.
    J-Lee

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