Everyone

Everyone gets lonely, once in a while
like theres no one, not within a mile
maybe we become forgotten
when you're on the bottom

*I like this. It's so true. I love how you express yourself so clearly*

everyone gets frightened, when they're alone
A frightened heart bleeds, when you're gone
when i wish upon the setting sun
i wonder, how long will i be the lonely on

*I love how this stanza is more intense than the first. I like how you wished on the sun instead of a star. Clever idea, the sun is the biggets star of them all :)*

everyone gets sad, upon the rising moon
and loosing you has came just too soon
thinking of you and quietly crying
beyond the light i'm slowly dying

*Aww this part is sad. I like how you go from everyones pain to just yours. Very creative idea. Nice work. Keep it up. Nik*

Thanks for your comment on my poem....you're poems are really good too and they really touch my heart...

I really enjoy reading your poems, they are very indepth....I very much appreciate your style of writing.....

Kalika

Hey this is an awesome poem...i really like... it thanks for commenting on my poems i appreciate it

xX-Katherine-Xx