nice poem! the rhymes in the first and second poem fit especially well, very well written, great work!

Good job

Aw very sad and touching poem. I really liked the rhyming in the first verse. Keep writing!
Take care,
Rachelxx

we all have to live in hope sweetie!!!! keep you chin up, another good poem!! and hope that he read it.
polly
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oh that is so sweet its a beautiful poem filled with emotion and feeling put across really well with words into an excellent poem that flows really well! i love this poem its great 5/5
bec xXx
i would comment more poems but i dont have much time comment more later promise

wish this wasn't true
for this is the day I always fear,
but I know it's all my fault.
I'm leaving now, so dry your tears.
kool stanza...u obviously have a lotta talent keep writing!

I think that the flow of this was a bit choppy, and some of the rhymes were forced. Try writing without rhymes once of twice and see how it goes!