Comments : The Powered

  • Wow...*is totally speechless* very nice job! I really liked it, the whole thing. Not one complaint here. ^_^ 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by pinkalias

    I really liked this piece. It's intriguing with a sense of power that surrounds the reader in an impacted atmpsphere that directs all attention to the main object of the piece, and I really admire that.
    Your text choice is obvciosly a tribute to the impact, the words are powerful match to beauty and create a display of poetic skill throughout the piece while adding beautiful symbols thoroughly written to perfectly fit the piece. I espcially admire the lines,
    "Though a chalked face
    And a ugly embrace
    Magical dominance
    Views with complete sense."
    Those lines I found particularly impactful, excellent job

  • 16 years ago

    by R F

    A Remarkable work indeed ,with wise ideas. Powerful work.

    Your Nickname attracted me and thank
    God i read your work,coz i like it.

    this was my fav. part:
    A man of vibrant air
    A female awarded of care

    and i loved the A Ugly phrase,its
    really special : )

    much Respect,
    Rua Francis.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sean

    This poem feels extremly deep and it's actually beyond my anaylising ability for the moment, it's intriuging and powerful in imagery, and it makes me feel the need to decipher the poem even if it feels partially obvious, it doesn't.

    Are we talking about mans power? gods power? love? it feels dark and yet bright, and in that confusion i'll sit here and try to find meaning within it.

    good poem, as you said about overuse of commas to me, i'm one for use of commas (Just general writing style i guess) and i prefer a poem with lots of grammar to create flow, just a suggestion which you really don't need to follow as the poem was well done.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    This poem is great. it's really different from what i am use to reading and it's nice getting the freshness out of it. nice job with vocabulary this poem just seems so peaceful and powerful in ways. wonderful job writing it.

    ~Jacklyn

    P.S. with media beauty i don't know if you got a little wrong idea with the tattoos, but many did. I was kind of using the tattoo's as a mask for that certain man. I am not saying that everyone wears this mask if they got tattoos, but to the man in the poem his tattoo meant nothing to him so it was like fakeness writen on him.

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderful simply, wonderful!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Ariana

    The rhyming in this is awesome, it doesn't sound forced at all but also is not out of time or anything -well done!
    Only improvemnet is the grammer in the first stanza, I think it should be 'and an ugly embrace.'