another great poem...

wow! amazing writing!!!

That was really beautiful, keep up the awesome work!

It was good use of vividness in vocabulary and imagery, but not enough feeling or emotion put into it. Keep writing.

nice poem!! keep it up!! :)

Huh, interesting format, I'll have to try that. I do some haikus... u no, 5 syl, 7 syl, 5 syl. But this is different. Good job, btw.