hey there, i like this poem, i think it has a nice twist ion it, however (not meaning to be critical) but i think there is something mising from the poem, but i still like it a lot. could you please check out some of my poems, thanx a heap.
Ben

A poem of self reflection - Great work. I think this poem is complete in all is simplicity .. Yet it's not so simple, more a simple complex poem. (oh forgive my non-making-sense-mood). Never the less this was outstanding to say the least. Structure and feeling = wonderful!

;;--Kalah

wow..another great poem.. i am also relate to that too.

wow,i can really relate to that poem, it was so well written with a great twist at the end, keep it up cos ur amazing

I liked what you were trying to do with this poem and i appreciate your efforts but i don't really like the poem. To me the subject just seems too cliche. Although you started off well (don't get me wrong i did like the beginning) but the ending was very weak. Good efforts, keep writing.

Wow.. another great poem. A nice twist makes this poem even better. I liked it. 5/5

excellent poem!!

Ahh you're right! It should be "you". Thanks!

again i loved it our amazing!!!!