I really admire this poem mostly because of the point/message you're trying to get across. I also like how you contradict yourself, for example:
"Peaceful in mind
But corrupt in soul
My hopes for life
Just an empty hole"
Peaceful and Corrupt- Pretty much an oxymoron, as well as comparing hope to being empty. Hope is never empty.

All in all, it was really well done.
5.

The last lines were the best in my opinion. This was a good poem, and i too liked the contradictions all throughout the poem. The length was good too cuz it wasn't too short or too long. 5/5!
SatuzKa

This is a really great poem. I like the rhyming structure and it has been written really well. 5/5. Love Emma xxx

brilliant! i like the thought and expressions. wonderful writing and use of words. :)

amazing! i really loved the way you wrote it. truly beautiful.
Ariane
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as always another excellent poems all of your words really touch my soul. Amazing as always, have a great day

I really like this.. I think you are a great writer... keep up the great writing... Xox Sherrie

I enjoyed the analogies and word usage and I think it was really good poetry. I'd love it hear it in a song I think it would be really cool.

fantastic poem. It really sums up the moment you stop and think about where you are headed as an individual and realise that your being pulled along by life's momentum irregardless.
My fave line is "i put my trust in a stranger and get betrayed again". When the people close to us don't live up to our "ideals", we'll look for them in other people and end up feeling betrayed when we realise they don't exist.
P.S thanks for your comments,means alot x

hmm...now this is interesting..and the idea is unique and original..give it a funky beat and it'll be a rap song..
lol kidding..5/5

Great Poem...Good Luck in your quest and I hope you find what you need..

Haven't experienced all of the above, but definitely understand the sense of lost path in life. The "nice" thing is that I've experienced it a few times in my life thus far and have each time moved on since I willed to do so. Where there is a will and Light action, there is a way. Bon chance, Jason.

Sweeet!! Haven't read one this good in a while. The mix of your way with words and the poem go together perfectly. Keep up the awesome work! Take care!
-Conner

Beautiful Jason, I think we all can feel this way at some point in life. Well written with so much meaning. hugs, lol, *Ann*

wow can really relate to this...think at some stage in everyones life they are going be able to realte to this...we all need to find our feet!!! excellent again (sorry bout all the comments but want to praise your work lol) xxxLoUxxx

Powerful write. I loved it.
Take care & God bless

HEY!! i like it. you're a good writer. (see some of my stuff) thanx*
5/5

I really loved this poem, and I can also really relate to it. Keep it up ;)