good use of the rhyme at the end of each line. very good

jemma

I like the way you used the same rhyming words on the first and last 3 lines, it worked well. The content was sad but amazing, keep it up xxx

good poem. i know what its like to write from emotions, alot of my poems are like that. keep writing, it helps as im sure you have found, keep up the good work

Exellent job! Very well put with true feelings behind it I like that! Check out some of mine if u would! Thanx!

amazing!!! absolutely beautiful. keep up the great work!
Ariane
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great write same rhymes in different ways really creative i like i like! I too am not recognized with this disguise of mine But i dont know how to take it off. you take care though. your friend, traj

Excellent poem - I love the meaning and your rhymes. Wonderful! :-) Thanks for the comment. Take care and God bless! <3

Thanks for your comment. Have taken some time to read through your work and think that you have a beautiful simplicity to your writing (the sign of a truly expressive poet), you manage to convey in a few words what it takes others (me included) twenty or thirty, and you're so young!!!!!!! An incredibly promising talent keep it up. Love Rach xx

i really liked it but i think it could have flowed better but again keep reinventing yourself you have an awesome gift and you know how to use it. Great poem

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this one's cool too, i like it very much:)
plz comment/vote on my poem "i represent all and nothing", thx. *hugs*

keep it up!:

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I loved this one I loved the title too

Unloved ♥