very good write, i like it alot 5/5

smiles, hugs and love, Angela

Well done...I love the depth of this one! I adore the line:
"i connect the dots of sadness"
Very nice....Holly

Well written dark poem

wow very powerful stuff! well done! i enjoyed it even though it was sad. keep up the work! please comment on my stuff
take care
xxxLoUxxx

awsome work =) I voted a 5!
very good..keep it up. Please check out my poem "Eternal Sunshine Of The Spotless Mind" it would mean so much tooo me.. thanks and take care!!

"i am in my dreams
and nothing is real anymore;
my jaws are clamped together
my eyes are stapled shut
a mask is over my head
my wrists are forever cut"

I LOVED that stanza. It was so powerful, so vivid. Put a nice picture (yet gruesome) in my head. Very vivid and sorrowful- yet with a very dark feel to it.
Well, I LOVED it. A nice poem indeed!
Great imagery and symbolism.
:-) 5/5!

good poem...I gave it a 4/5....very expressive and to the point....the feeling of grief overcomes the reader (and the tone is a wonderfully brilliant thing).

This is a deep poem that sounds like theres a story behind the writing. good job. Its really really good. thanks for letting us read your poems.

well dun hun i really liked it keep writin xxx

excellent wording, very eloquent.

great job. 5/5 keep writing i love your poems

Affective...remarkable imagery...heavy stuff in there...very dark...I Love it.

xxx

simply amazing.

exactly how i feel at times..many times... these are very moving poems, i love them all, their emotions explode with ever word....outstanding.
thx for comments on mine, i think u would like my "decision to betray ressurection"
<3 weeping wolf

It was deep, but the flow was off. A lot of the rhyming was forced and a lot of the content was repeated. It could use some work, but it does have potential. Keep writing.

(claps) well done, great flow and rhyme scheme. Great emotion put into it, great job. ^_^x

I enjoyed it. I'd say that the only part that bothered me at all was the goodnight tonight rhyme used at the ending of the last stanza... That sort of rhyming always bothered me because it sounds like you're repeating the same work twice (most likely because they are both compound words, which is a shame). I would have greatly prefered it if you just got rid of that rhyme altogether, although you might find something to replace it if you are inclined to do so.

I enjoyed it. I'd say that the only part that bothered me at all was the goodnight tonight rhyme used at the ending of the last stanza... That sort of rhyming always bothered me because it sounds like you're repeating the same work twice (most likely because they are both compound words, which is a shame). I would have greatly prefered it if you just got rid of that rhyme altogether, although you might find something to replace it if you are inclined to do so.

Another excellent poem
but this one is so sad :(
well done
xoxoxox
~*MaRy*~