I enjoyed reading this poem.It has a smooth touching story..I gave you 5.
Jeff

Great description I think this was a rememberince poem am I right?

I love this poem; very original with a nice refreshing format. Presents a nice image Great job!

~dandy~

I took you addvice works really well...been writeing all day and i think im getting a bit better..thanks so much..*MUAH*

Why do you read it if your going to judge it the wrong way, i'm posting it because it's my views and i want you all to know my views, not because of the comments, i could careless about the comments, i just want you all to know where i am coming from but keep on with the comments sometimes it's good having comments, i'll work on not so much puncuation. god bless you, yesterday i was also in a bad tired mood when i wrote that

Excellent poem. The depth and flow of it was well-managed. Expressive and honest.
-Kate

Very sweet poem

The depth was good ... !! 5/5

It was good. but i didnt really understand the concept of it. im sure it means alot to you tho.

Wo wamazing your really good and i love your style 5.5

This poem made me think...I really don't know what to say...Full of emotion...Plz look at mine...Thanks and keep writting...

Once again, very different and amusing. The content was spectacular and touching. You really have a great way with words. Keep it up! 5/5

It's a really different poem and I don't know if I really got the meaning, your poems are always full of depth. Is it about the first man not being happy with himself but yet the man in tatters doesn't have much but is happy at what he does have? Either way your poems all seem to mean other than what we see on the surface and that is what makes them stand apart from the narrative ones on the site.

Nice original poem! it flowed well and it used good language! 5/5