I don't know why I wrote this poem, but somehow it just felt right to write it. Please tell me honestly what u think, thanks a lot.

I like it! great job! 5/5

much love
savannah

beautiful and wonderfully written, keep it up xxxxxx

outstanding, sorry I have no advice YOUR POETRY SUITS MY TASTE

wow I liked it

wow that was excellent really vivid picture.cant falut it at all! well done
xxxLoUxxx

i really liked your poem..a five!

Very well written beautiful poem! I wouldn't change a thing about this poem! 5/5 Take Care! Brooke

wonderful poem....might wanna check the spelling on "sown", though. I do believe it is "sewn", though I could be mistaking. Anyway, very expressive, wonderful fluency, and great grammatical points. 5/5.

I am an idiot, lol, sown is right....i thought you meant create, or to have sewn, sorry! I take that back :X

Christa

This is real inspirational. One of your best I would say! I don't think there's anything I could say to help you improve it! Well done! Sarah-Lou x x x

you are soooo good its just simply amazing! i dont know how to describe it i love your writing style and what you write about is so original with style. Oh wow that was really good! just there was a little bit of word clutter with too many syllables but other then that, it was excellent!

Nothing I can say that hasn't been said in terms of criticism. Well written, original and easily relatable.

that was really good!

that was really good!

You are 15? Thats unreal. Thats a great poem for any age let alone for a lady so young. Keep up the writing...superb talent.

Why?It's a very nice ending!But if you think you can make it better, do!Again, you have a talent in description.I like it when the style of a person's pooetry is obvious even when you have read only two poems.It shows you are not toying with the idea, and that you write maturely. I really like your work

personally I don't think you should change the poem. I know people read poems in a different way and experience the flow and rhymes in different way. My way of reading gave me a sense of great flow, beautiful rhymes and excellent work on this piece. Also the lines syllables worked well together, not to many or to few in different lines.

Best wishes,
Patrik