beautiful.

WOW, for somehting u described as a "cheesy poem" i think it rocks!
Love ya xxxxxxxxx

wow! this one's awesome. great poem, vry very well written
5/5. Take Care, Always Believe in Love, Amit

this is a nice poem.. ncie job.

aww i really liked this poem alot! a 5/5

great poem. I love all your poems. Pleaze comment on mine:)

thanx 4 all ur comments katie am just havin a read thru ur poems and ur a reli fab writer, and of course r goin on my faves. keep writin bbz its worth it ur poems r sum of the best ive red lately xxx

An excellent depth of feeling shown xx

great poem, you ended it so nicely too about how we all have dreams we never want to end. sorry i'm dead tired right now and just got back from a school trip so i will make more comments on you wonderful poems tomarrow! thanks for the comments, always

~PLP~ lil slam~

"close enough, it go's" Should've been
"...It Goes..."
Charismatic writing for a 15 year old teenager. Keep it up. One suggesiton. Write like you've never written before, and smile like today's the last day. Stages that you go through will only make you a stronger person, and the more you write, the stronger your writing will seem. Ill check back on you a few weeks..I KNOW YOU CAN DO BETTER!
<~ Take care sweetie
Hina