They Say, I Tried

I saw this poem as something like a song. It was so beautifully written, and the repeating verses kept it up to date. Though I do see this as something more along the lines of a sad poem and not a love poem.

I really love your poetry... each phrase evokes images suffused with such depth its impressive.. i wish i could be of more help and actually critique this, but its not an easy poem to work with.. this is a very abstract poem with a lot of imagery/metaphor to convey a strong, helpless, kind of message..

I tried to be somebody
One day.
But as they say,
I crashed and burned.
Somebody, my best
Was nobody to you.
I tried

i cant stress how much i enjoy the alterating stanza,.. thats really a good idea and for this piece, the changes within each individual stanza(though few)were a great accentuation..

id have to say my favorite stanza is my third.. other than that.. i dont got much for you, unfortunately,.. but what i said is true.. good job + pZ out

I must admit it was a little bit hard to the first time, I read it twice and took my time the second time and it made much more sense, the beautiful use of symbolism and methaphor, really makes it a little harder to follow but does show your skills with that certain aspect of writting. All in all, a good read, intriguing and interesting to read the first and second time i did so, and i did like it's flow
Good job! 5/5

Excellent poem! 5 keep it up! I can relate to this poem! <3

excellant..............you have an amazing way wiyh all your word, you are now in my favorites.............love ya becky