loved it sooo much! amazing.. i hope you do continue to write..you have a gift

That was one of most beautiful things I ever read in my entire life. There was parts where I thought I was reading an Emo song, but all the same, it was absolutely wonderful.

I had to re-read it about three times to make sure I took it all in.

Just incredible.

captivating story somehow i think there is going to be a part 111 i enjoyed it 5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

I liked it. Theres no room on my favourites so just leave a message on one of my poems when u write part 3 and i'll be happy to read it! :)

Very nice, I could feel the emotion. Keep it up.

That was such a powerful poem, I really liked reading it and Im definitely going to look at more, It flowed so well, I loved this part
"It was six o'clock in the morning
And he only slept for two hours
Everything was so confusing
And he couldn't stop on thinking"

well done

I really like this very emotional.
5/5

hey good poem

very good poem!! thanks for you comment/vote it really meant a lot to me... 5/5 for this one =) hugs

very nice poem really looking forward for your next one well done

It's not too long, I think you ended it well. However, you seem to have a problem with tense. Which means you write sentences like:
she sat down
and eats ice cream.

It doesn't work because you're using "sat", which is past-tense (or in other words it happened in the past), and "eats" which is present-tense (or it's happening right now.)

When you write, you have to stick to a tense.

Otherwise, really good.

WOW! This is a great sequal to ur other stroy! I loved it just as much! So sad! Your a very talented writer!
Much Love.....
hAiLy

hey, it's good. nice job. 5/5

~no more

I feel they same way about a situation i am in right now :( good poem!

This was also very good and touching!!! I enjoyed reading both of them, they are so heartbreaking!!! I love them, keep writing, you have talent!!!

*Hugs Sabrina*

lol, you were right about the long part...but I enjoyed every bit of it. You did a great job keep up the good work:) MuchLove~unseentears

You have struck a very deep and hidden chord with me.

Hey, nice poem u wrote there
cud u please some time look at mine
take care
ps. im filipino 2 bye