David this makes you seem psychotic.I don't think I should sit next to you in the library anymore.Lol

yes it worked! awesome write!

yee it worked. good one though... keep it up man

great job. love the rhyming scheme. it was classed under dark poetry and thats what it portrayed.glad you aint psychotic though

Makes you sound a little crazy but I reallt don't think you are! I have to say that was very good! Brooke

Hey I will go with you if you read my new poem Set Free! Thanx I would appreciate it! Thanx! Keep up the good work!

wicked poem it got chills running up spine.

So evil, you are a great writer, really had me hooked! Keep it up!
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its cool

Yes, it worked, but may I suggest something? Your last word, furry, I think you should change it to 'fury'. :)
Nice work, keep it up
-LydaRose-

wow it really did work good job!
good luck
~JaSmIn~

Excellent use of Imagery. I felt like i was constructing the murder... I loved it! One of the best murder poetry on the web
~Hina

Yes. It worked very well.

Interesting and thanks for the note at the bottom i now feel so much better commenting:) I liked it even though dark poetry is not really my scene....I agree bout adding a little bit of flow as that will really having people captivated and afraid!

great poem, very evilish...worked great !

yes i worked!!!!! cool poem some poems let yea wander but this kept me glued to the screen.....5 x)

good job yeah you got ur evil poem down pat lol

Yes it worked !!!
I loves it just loved it
keep it up
I love how you write is so awesome
I love how this poem could paint a picture in my head .
April

yea it worked it sounds really evil ive had those feelings were i just want to go crazy on someone n kill but i hold back im not ccrazy just really short tempered

Indeed it did work...very well I would say. You've got quite a talent for sounding like a malicious, wicked, killer...I wouldn't have thought you were actually psychotic...but you entered the mind of a killer well...

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