Great poem!
You are really talented!!
xxx Keep up the good work! xxx

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Look at my stuff, to!

~Ciao Lipton

Haha... really this is my first comment, so I had to make an impression. Onto the poem, though.

Awesome message. Tells people that life is no walk in the park, but is more a trudge through the darkness. However, it seemed to me that in some places your words were a little crammed together (trying to fit a single line with a bunch of words).

You also seem to be a little "reckless" in your spelling, too. *cough*

Good write. Good job. I didn't expect anything less from you, seeing your intelligence in the forums.

~Ciao Lipton

lol, my spell checker told me that reckless was wrong! That was how I spelled it originally, a bug maybe? Hmmm.

Thank you Lipton, you're the best.

wow...I loved this poem. I thought I was reading an autobiography when I read this couplet:

Those broken stones that grace your step,
Those cracks along the way,
Instruct you, for each time you fall,
You’ll get up, your due you’ll pay.
My advice is to go awfully slow,
Meticulously carve your path,
For once you discover you’re on the wrong turn,
It’s far too late to double back.

Anyways I loved it. Take care.

Jesse

Healthy read well worth the time, Great poem

Mayhap a little too much wisdom for one your physical age... methinks your soul is showing. ;)

Outstanding!!!! I totally loved it. Pure talent:)