I can relate to this and friends should stay beside you at all times no matter what it is... real true friends are hard to come by wonderful poem :) 5/5 sorry this happen to you :(

Amanda, rubbish---this is truly a well written poem. Friends are truly a treasure. hugs, lots of love, *Ann*

This is so good, i can so relate to this. It reminds me of one of my friends. James is right, true friends are very hard to come by. Beautiful poem!
xox

Great poem hun! I hope everything turns out ok! I really liked it! Keep it up!
Love alwayz.....
Haily
XOXOXOXOX

Hows about you are the only one i know who doesn't know that bestest is ACTUALLY a word! it's in the dictionary!

this is really nice and really well writen keep it up

yeh b2dp Cos is short for because :)

My english can't be that bad cos i got a good grade in my exams :)

Very well written poem. sorry bout that friend still.
Remember, that friends like Jade, are hard to come by, so treasure her.

it started off real good you had some good words but then you went on a tangent and I got lost but anyway good attempt

Yeh it's one of them poems you have to read in a certain way

Wow Amanda, this poem really made me sad.... Hope that you are ok??? Please don't be sad....I'm your friend and I'll be here to talk with you if you need me to....

*Love Sabrina*

nice work. hope things work out for you.
i agree with one or two points that born2die made, but overall, the poem is well done. i dont think its unoriginal or poorly written. the thing i agree with is that slang has no place in poetry. thats just my opinion, so you can feel free to ignore me.

i used slang because it sounded better with the flow but never mind eh? I don't mind advice as long as it's not spiteful nitpicking. LOL :)

Amanda, I felt that the poem started off strong and that you expressed exactly how you were feeling at that moment. I see beauty in any amount of slang or regional dialect and I don't subscribe to poetry being something that has to conform so I say, well done you, you had a crap day with someone who let you down and you dealt with it in a constructive and healthy way by writing down something that represented your emotions at that ver second. I think that is something to be tremendously proud of! xx

l think it's really well written but hey, whoever listens to me. anyway, don't stop writing and l hope everything turns out OK for you

that was great. i have a poem similar to it called 'Trust'. i've been let down by a friend before too; she destroyed my trust for her. great job. 5/5

You could have told me in a nicer way than that. I AM a poet and don't mind critisism but I do NOT want to change all my poems. they are my true thoughts and feelings, not YOURS and if you leave anymore nasty comments i WILL complain!!! Born2diepride i DON'T want you to read anymore of my work because you are nasty and i didn't ask for that unkind comment left on my heartache poem! :)

Thanks all of you who have helped me to make my poetry better. I took all your advice but b2d4p because I don't like spiteful people :)

I changed cos to because now. See i took your advice Can't we just be friends? Please, I hate arguments :(