Such a good outlook on life. Very well done. I can relate I have made many mistakes and set many goals to improve my life. Keep it up! Take Care! Brooke 5/5

there are some here who rate on content, and that is perfectly understandable. there are some who rate on structure, and that, too, is perfectly understandable. ill rate on both.

content: 5/5 (thought it was excellent)
structure: 3/5 (choppy. not unreadable, but choppy)
overall: 4/5

honestly, i thought the poem was wonderful. you have a lot of talent, and you should really consider just revising your work to give it that extra "something" to make it perfect. you are just a hair's breadth away from being masterful.

im only 14 uno :P but thanx again u will use your advice

i will use your advice*

That was so beautiful and inspiring...it was really positive and can make a person think...amazing girl like all your poems...ah another 5/5!!
KIU
luv yer gurl,
--Sierra Rae

pretty good 5/5 ~keep it up~

-no more

Excellent write, very well done...
5/5, take care, always believe in love, Amit

Cool. Really interesting, and not what I'd expect from somebody your age.

Nice work.

(not that I can say much about the age thing...lol)