this was awesome. I really liked it 5/5
love always,
Elissa

Nicely written, Heather. Beware of What?

;-)

5/5, Take Care, Always Believe in Love,

Nidhi's Love, Amit.

Awe I loved it, it's so beautiful take care 5/5 - rachel

Beautiful, just a awesome piece. hugs, love, *Ann*

Awesome Heather, I loved it. Great job. 5/5

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

Not sure I understand, but I am sure that it has some meaning to you. Possibly an old boyfriend, or a relation to society? Anyway, read some of my work if you find the time.

Hey! That was a great free verse.... I must have rubbed off on you ;) It has a nice tone to it... the first line in each section is emphasized almost to the point where you can hear it being said louder...and then what follows seems like a wisper. Awesome job!
Aaron

Thanks Aaron.

Nobody, it actually relates to society giving pity to those who are depressed, have eating disorders, or anything of that sort. But I'd much rather pity the ones who've never had a harsh experience because they'll never make it in the world that awaits them.

Heather.

beautiful write hun, awesome work...lol and thanks for let me know about the site.....

Make Peace in our heart
Spread it with Love one to another
Cheer up the world... heaven shall smile
May we enjoy the blessing of life
now and everafter-------big hugs, love clouds.~

If that didn't give me the chills I don't know what did! Your work is so unique! I truly truly mean that! You have got such a talent and no matter the categorie you write about , the stlye you use, or the words you say, you always seem to come out with pure gold!
Excellence my friend!
~Chelsey~

Great work sweetheart.You are one talented poet that should never stop writting.I love your works.Keep them coming and keep it real.Thanks for your comments on mine.Jeff

ooh, i love it!! bravo!! amazing!

5/5

love always...x x

Well done...I love the power and strength in this! Brilliant message as well! Keep it up~Holly

great poem, i exspecially like the last part of it!

~PLP~ lil slam~ hugs & love~

Not your best, but it is not your worst either. It seemed to lack the thought process that you normally have, the one that lets me know that you put a lot of time and effort into your poems.

Free versing isn't really a thing that a lot of poets can do, unfortunately i was born with that gift to wirte whatever i want on a keyboard or a pen and pad.

I think you should stick to your strengths.

That is just my opinion, take it for what it is worth.

Signed,
Dark Savior

P.S.

Heather....i love myself, don't try and say that you loved me. I am happy with who i am. It is just that you cared about wade and you couldn't wait that long for me to come down and see you.

I know what i am, heather....don't blame it on low self esteem, i know i'm a good guy and it's your loss. You push the ones who get too close to you away, i pity you in many ways. When you die your going to have people who truely don't know who you are, you are going to have people who got too close to you and you pushed them away.

Signed,
Dark Savior.

Please don't say that "if you love something then set it free, if it comes back to you then it was yours if not then it was never truely yours" it was a quote by a perverted man in a time of mass histartia, he wasn't in his right mind. I know of his history and know that it is one of his only quotes.

"that which is done out of love, takes place beyond good and evil"

Please don't try and justify anything, i am VERY HAPPY with myself, before i wasn't, don't say that you will get back togeather with me if i ever get more self confidence, i know you won't, because you'll be with wade for abit then you'll push him away, because you are scared of commitment scared of being hurt, that is fine. I know that i will not push away the ones i love.

Even though you have hurt me very much, i still do love you Heather. Like i said before, i think it would be best if we didn't speak with one and other for sometime.

I don't wish for our laundry to be aired out on the site such as you have, i wish for it to remain between us. so i would thank you for your co-operation.

I will continue to comment on my poems in an unbiast manor the same as i normally would, if it is a poem about wade then i won't read it. but always remember in a little island off canada there was once true love that would have done anything for you.

"Nullum desiderium" - Latin (Dark Savior)

P.S. True love waits for another, read every story about true love, it is all about patience and virtue.

Heather that was so cute!! Great write. Keep writing. Take care

Cool but not as great as some of your other ones. Still beats everything I've written. Liked the word choice and all. Keep up the great work.

Verry insightfull, you sure your only 16 lol as always Heather Great write!
5/5
Dave.....

wow,another nice poem of yours Heather :-) ,it was a bit stressed but
yet the whole work was different,i loved the last two phrases.

5/5

much Respect,
Rua Francis.

sure, no prob....count on me!