Comments : Two Worlds Apart

  • 19 years ago

    by Elissa

    this was awesome. I really liked it 5/5
    love always,
    Elissa

  • 19 years ago

    by Amit

    Nicely written, Heather. Beware of What?

    ;-)

    5/5, Take Care, Always Believe in Love,

    Nidhi's Love, Amit.

  • 19 years ago

    by Child of God

    Awe I loved it, it's so beautiful take care 5/5 - rachel

  • 19 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    Beautiful, just a awesome piece. hugs, love, *Ann*

  • 19 years ago

    by Angie

    Awesome Heather, I loved it. Great job. 5/5

    Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

  • 19 years ago

    by Pianist

    Not sure I understand, but I am sure that it has some meaning to you. Possibly an old boyfriend, or a relation to society? Anyway, read some of my work if you find the time.

  • 19 years ago

    by Knight_of_Blackrose

    Hey! That was a great free verse.... I must have rubbed off on you ;) It has a nice tone to it... the first line in each section is emphasized almost to the point where you can hear it being said louder...and then what follows seems like a wisper. Awesome job!
    Aaron

  • 19 years ago

    by Heather M Craig

    Thanks Aaron.

    Nobody, it actually relates to society giving pity to those who are depressed, have eating disorders, or anything of that sort. But I'd much rather pity the ones who've never had a harsh experience because they'll never make it in the world that awaits them.

    Heather.

  • 19 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    beautiful write hun, awesome work...lol and thanks for let me know about the site.....

    Make Peace in our heart
    Spread it with Love one to another
    Cheer up the world... heaven shall smile
    May we enjoy the blessing of life
    now and everafter-------big hugs, love clouds.~

  • 19 years ago

    by Chelsey

    If that didn't give me the chills I don't know what did! Your work is so unique! I truly truly mean that! You have got such a talent and no matter the categorie you write about , the stlye you use, or the words you say, you always seem to come out with pure gold!
    Excellence my friend!
    ~Chelsey~

  • 19 years ago

    by Jeff

    Great work sweetheart.You are one talented poet that should never stop writting.I love your works.Keep them coming and keep it real.Thanks for your comments on mine.Jeff

  • 19 years ago

    by Andrea

    ooh, i love it!! bravo!! amazing!

    5/5

    love always...x x

  • 19 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Well done...I love the power and strength in this! Brilliant message as well! Keep it up~Holly

  • 19 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    great poem, i exspecially like the last part of it!

    ~PLP~ lil slam~ hugs & love~

  • 19 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    Not your best, but it is not your worst either. It seemed to lack the thought process that you normally have, the one that lets me know that you put a lot of time and effort into your poems.

    Free versing isn't really a thing that a lot of poets can do, unfortunately i was born with that gift to wirte whatever i want on a keyboard or a pen and pad.

    I think you should stick to your strengths.

    That is just my opinion, take it for what it is worth.

    Signed,
    Dark Savior

    P.S.

    Heather....i love myself, don't try and say that you loved me. I am happy with who i am. It is just that you cared about wade and you couldn't wait that long for me to come down and see you.

    I know what i am, heather....don't blame it on low self esteem, i know i'm a good guy and it's your loss. You push the ones who get too close to you away, i pity you in many ways. When you die your going to have people who truely don't know who you are, you are going to have people who got too close to you and you pushed them away.

    Signed,
    Dark Savior.

    Please don't say that "if you love something then set it free, if it comes back to you then it was yours if not then it was never truely yours" it was a quote by a perverted man in a time of mass histartia, he wasn't in his right mind. I know of his history and know that it is one of his only quotes.

    "that which is done out of love, takes place beyond good and evil"

    Please don't try and justify anything, i am VERY HAPPY with myself, before i wasn't, don't say that you will get back togeather with me if i ever get more self confidence, i know you won't, because you'll be with wade for abit then you'll push him away, because you are scared of commitment scared of being hurt, that is fine. I know that i will not push away the ones i love.

    Even though you have hurt me very much, i still do love you Heather. Like i said before, i think it would be best if we didn't speak with one and other for sometime.

    I don't wish for our laundry to be aired out on the site such as you have, i wish for it to remain between us. so i would thank you for your co-operation.

    I will continue to comment on my poems in an unbiast manor the same as i normally would, if it is a poem about wade then i won't read it. but always remember in a little island off canada there was once true love that would have done anything for you.

    "Nullum desiderium" - Latin (Dark Savior)

    P.S. True love waits for another, read every story about true love, it is all about patience and virtue.

  • 19 years ago

    by Mustardhart

    Heather that was so cute!! Great write. Keep writing. Take care

  • 19 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Cool but not as great as some of your other ones. Still beats everything I've written. Liked the word choice and all. Keep up the great work.

  • 19 years ago

    by Dead As Yesterday

    Verry insightfull, you sure your only 16 lol as always Heather Great write!
    5/5
    Dave.....

  • 19 years ago

    by R F

    wow,another nice poem of yours Heather :-) ,it was a bit stressed but
    yet the whole work was different,i loved the last two phrases.

    5/5

    much Respect,
    Rua Francis.

  • 19 years ago

    by YOUAREFU*KINGRETARDED

    sure, no prob....count on me!