Comments : All I Am Is Pain

  • 19 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    it was alright....4/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Marjan

    hey richard, it's sooo sad but I really
    enjoyed reading it.
    take care,
    marjan

  • 19 years ago

    by David Paul

    Good description. Love your style. kilman = David B.

  • 19 years ago

    by undying blusher

    I empathize with this poem. I am hoping you don't still feel so much of the pain spoken of in the poem...if it's your true feelings (which it certainly seems so.)

    "i am to broken for love
    to depressed, and easily
    hurt, i don't want this pain anymore."

    The "to" in those lines should be "too." And I think it'd be better to say "too easily hurt.." to make it parallel with the other two phrases. A little suggestion for you. :)

    Anyway, I think you've got quite a gift for poetry.

    xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by SuperJenius

    I Loved it ; it waz WiCKed TransCEnDEnt ; AWsoME
    ~HazE