it was alright....4/5

hey richard, it's sooo sad but I really
enjoyed reading it.
take care,
marjan

Good description. Love your style. kilman = David B.

I empathize with this poem. I am hoping you don't still feel so much of the pain spoken of in the poem...if it's your true feelings (which it certainly seems so.)

"i am to broken for love
to depressed, and easily
hurt, i don't want this pain anymore."

The "to" in those lines should be "too." And I think it'd be better to say "too easily hurt.." to make it parallel with the other two phrases. A little suggestion for you. :)

Anyway, I think you've got quite a gift for poetry.

xxx

I Loved it ; it waz WiCKed TransCEnDEnt ; AWsoME
~HazE