Dark Clouds

by Shattered Smile   May 31, 2005


The skies were so blue,
with white fluffy clouds.

The laughter of family,
laughter of myself now.

Smiles upon everyones face,
i love this great feeling of fun.

Then hes gone...with a snap of a finger...

The skies go very black,
dark clouds hover over us.

The laughs has faded,
into the storm of terror and sorrow.

Smiles turn into frowns,
with tear stained faces.

Life has left us all down,
it never changes again.

Sadness is all anyone can feel,
around here anymore.

*i know this poem stinks! i just got back into wiriting again,so i am trying hard,so PLEASE PLEASE RATE AND COMMMENT,n tell me how it is!! thanks [i will return the favor!]*

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  • 18 years ago

    by Nikki

    Great poem hun, ik how it feels when someone leaves =/ keep up the work you're a great writier ^_^

  • 18 years ago

    by coupon can

    Awesome poem. i love it. keep up the good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Leighann

    This is very good filled with emotion, it could use a little revising but all in all it was a great poem

  • 18 years ago

    by FlowerThatDied

    This is actualli quite good keep it up x plz plz comment and vote on some of mine x

  • 18 years ago

    by JLT

    That is sooo sad... I don't think it stinks.. It has a lot of emotions in it.. And i know how it is coming back into writing so keep up the good work.. You're a good writer.. You have talent... 5/5 *hugs* You'll get A LOT better..

    ~Jessica

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