wow! thank u for writing this poem...it describes my life so well right now, and i thought about it a lot. i could never put it in words though, keep writing.

omg....great choice of words nd the flow was wonderful!....very sad poem....5/5

Flawless rhyme this time around...very nice.

aww thats soo sad.

I love your poem...I can really relate.5/5

You really got it down right. Again. Keep writing like this...and if you still feel like this...well just know you can always come to me, and I'll listen.

xxx

kool poem i liked it
u should hav a look at sum of myn like Blood From The Blade if u want
thnx 4 listining 2 me
from xox fred xox

Great poem! I really liked it! I have read a lot of your stuff, you're really good! Keep it up!

!*Shannon*!

This one sounds more like a narrator speaking, and not you directly. Try doing that in your poems more. Try to make the voice (or the "I" in the poem) sound like a narrator and not the writer. That will help get your poem across to more people. And it helps get you better at writing.