good job putting your feelings on a paper.. One thing.. write out your numbers, don't take shortcuts when you are writing a poem.. just me .. Hope everything works out for you...

its has a good story to it but i dont really see any rhythim in it poems dont have to rhyme but do need rhythim anyways urs is ok

Well done, a little messy in spots, but that happens when you're writing this kind of thing.

not to keen on love poems, but this was good. 5/5

hey, this is wonderful. keep it up.
you're really talented.
take care, Marjan

very cute good work

Awwww.... that is sooo sad. Can't wait to read the sequel

i still love him! wooooot!

pretty good...keep writing!

awww! the waltzing part is cool!! love it
peace,
abcede ^,^

I see what you mean your poem was awesome but your other ones are EVEN BETTER so i guess i will get better too and i will also hopefully get some more pupblicity. thx for the advice.......

Did you ask him out?
5/5
from lizzy

Never ended up asking him out. Turns out he is said to even have made out with that girl on our elementary school campus. They go to the same high school now, and we are all about to be seniors.