Well done!! Keep writing!! ;) 5/5

Beautiful in it's subdued sadness. Superb.

:O AWESOME!!!! Very depressing indeed......5/5 Peace! //ari\\

excellent poem. I like how you portrayed drowning in another sense. very creative and sad. Take care xxxx

all i can say is...awesome poem. left me at a loss of words. 5/5

The message in this I think is divine. So many people take life for granted. To often people say there's always tomorrow. There's not and you have to live life to the fullest. Excellent write...I think in so little words you portrayed a message people can't in a book. The sense of drowning puts such a twist on the poem...a double meaning I think. Drowning in the thoughts of the life you didn't live.... I liked the sudden stop to the story also...it made "Make every moment matter" stand out so much more clear. Another excellent write....I'm going to add you to my favorites. I'll be looking for more. :)

good job!!!