Ok louse the silky down part.
lips of cherry and so passionate,
Or at least told him so,
And last one,,, her heart is broke forever more..... Over all it was an ohsome poem. The descriptions where wonderful.

Well done, I liked the style and conveyance.

this is a wonderful poem and the discription rocked, images were poping into my mind and they seemed so detailed and real
great job

oh, this is very well written. you express
your feelings sooo well. keep it up.
much love, Marjan

good one ur a great poet

This is an awesoem poem! I can relate to it although that kinda sounds weird. This poem was creative and sweet in a dark kind of way. Check out some of my stuff.
~Chelsey 5/5

woah! i love the ending!! great twist! 5/5
peace,
aBcede

A sad but beautiful poem! I really liked the storyline and descriptions. The first stanza was my favourite!
Good write!
5/5