again, really good, you have talent!

I love this neverending balance between just general benevolence, and well, malevolence. This poem seems just a bit sketchy at times. Lines could be extended or shortened just to add spice to its rhythym. But the idea is very displayed here, and its rather refrshing to see someone writing without feeling a desperate need to sound like Dr Seuss, so i thank you for that. The ending lines though. I dont like to tell interpretations of other peoples work, i think that its very ignorant, but i will tell you this, as i saw it, it was like you lost some ground on that last note there, changed a stance or got lost in your stance you were trying to hold, or something. Couldnt really figure it out, but it bothered me a little bit. Great ideas, very few and minuet problems with flow and rhythym, well put together though. Great job.

Good poem, I love dark poetry, my favourite category, well done on this one, I personally enjoyed it and liked each stanza as much as the next, well done to you

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That was an excellent poem! 5 I really liked this one out of all of them! But i think it should be in the "poems about life section" not in "dark/fantasy" well thats my opinion lol Keep it up

You are right...lol...I moved it over! Thanks!

Original idea I think and one of my fave poems of yours so far. Look forwards to reading more. X

I real liked this one. The way you turned your words was ahsome.

Great poem! I liked the message you sent and the flow was good too. Good work!
Keep it up*hugs*

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Excellent, I loved it and I gave it a 5! Easy to relate with and understand!

I really liked this poem. The words flow really well. Great work.

Great job! your last one was better but this was still incredibly awesome! i'm ganna add ya to my favs! great job! 5/5!!