Comments : Innocent Girl

  • 18 years ago

    by undying blusher

    I say well done...I know many people who have similar thoughts and questions...and the last line was an interesting twist...

    Take care of yourself.

    xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    What made you turn to tears,
    And the blade of your knife?
    I like that line, the way you wrote that was different and good
    Your tears they are a poison.
    should be
    Your tears, they are a poison
    whoa, surprise ending, nice job, I like that, 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley

    I'm here for ya hunny baby darlin'!!!! really!! Great poem, but it's sad that it's you in the end...(well, it was you in the beginning, but we found out in the end) You're a good writer! Keep it up! Love yas!