very well written, i love the ending! keep it up!

*claps slowly* Great Poem. There was only 1 line that messed with the flow but its pretty small. Anyways its a very good poem, something I can definetly relate to. (especially when your the son of one of the most pride filled father you can come across to)

great work!! mwaz.. take care Stephy :):)

awww i really liked this poem. it should good emotion. 5/5

Hey thats how i feel alot of the time.. like i'm not good enough for my dad.. or that he doesnt care.. sorry you have to feel that!! and i know sorry doesnt help because it doesnt take your pain away.. but its all i can say.. oh the poem once again was really good.. i love your writting!! bye bye EJ

this is superb !!!!!!!

Great poem. Deep and meaningful with a good sense of stlye and a good flow. Very tragic.

Hey... great poem... it's really good...

check mine out sometime...

*..KimiC..* XxXo0oXxX

I can relate..my dad screams at me..and then the next day he will say he is sorry and still loves me...but mental abuse is just as bad as physical abuse!! I hope you are alright! Great job!! 5/5

Excellent work!! I loved it! I feel the same way with my dad, I try my best to make him proud but somehow I always fail. keep up the good work!

this was my fav. one so far i liked how the rhyming scheme was the same the whold way through and the story was one im sure many can relate to b/c i felt like it was talking about me...great poem 5/5

Hey erikka, yet another amzing poem.. u cease to amze me! anyways this one was awesome too.. i really liked the ending though.. it was the perfect way to end the poem 5/5!

I can relate to this poem a lot, maybe thats why it really stuck out to me as the best so far

well done

xxx

Venting are we? Any ways not bad. Rhyme is slightly forced sounding. Written for folks with parent trouble i take. Try putting it into a story next time.

awww.. nice poem.. i kno exactly how u feel :(

*~peace and love~*

That was awesome
u could check out mine they about my dad
i think u would like them
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