Hmmm.. great poem, but feel it ended a little early ;/ as if you started the poem, but rushed to finish it... Kind regards from Kane

Very descriptive and very well thought out. Love how you used such imagery and it peaked my curosity (or however you spell it... man I can't write today) of how you placed every single word to make it feel like that word belonged in that sentance. Great job ^_^x

this poem was well thought out as red tears of the soul said for one of your first poems its pretty darn good!!

-Josiah

If it seems a bit rushed...that's because this is only one part from a two page poem that was for my poetry class...it was a poem about poems and there was supposed to be three tiny poems in it...but mine weren't so short so yeah...it's from a super long poem...this is the only part I liked from it.

Thanks people!

xxx

I don't know if you meant it to be a metaphore or i am just reading too much into it. I think it is amazing and it is definately YOUR BEST PEICE. I can honestly say that without having to lie or do anything about it. If the metaphore is true then this poem is truely outstanding.

This is definately an amazing peice, i don't think anyone can say anything bad about it.

Beautiful imagery