coolie! Good job! And thx for the comment!

I loved this poem! Creative and good word choice! Dark poems are always my favorite! The last two stanzas were my favorite! You did an exellent job! Take Care! Brooke~

This was a good poem I enjoyed it alot I think if you gave this character more of a background, how he got this way endless struggle things like this it would be very well written but all and all a good write all around...

wonderful.. I really love vampires and this poem is amazing. thanx a lot for your comment it means a lot.. .nice work!

its a lil different... i've never read a poam about being a vampire... but its kinda cool and the way you wrote it is intregeing... you should write one about a vampire on hunt for blood and stuff like that... id like to read that... let me know if you do it and ill read it...
amanda

not to shabby. good use of words. pretty dark which i like. keep it up.

this is a really great poem. keep it up. =)

Awesome. Creative. I love it. =-)

I really liked it but then again I like poems of a fantasy variety. You really gave your character a personality, which is often hard to do in so few lines.

Pretty good overall. I thought some of the rhyming was forced, but I liked the ideas behind the poem. Keep working on it, girlie.

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Hey, loved the poem, yuo read darren shan dont you? keep writin bout my brethren

Hey, now i like that! 5/5 Im sure ill be back to read some more! But im not sure if hating what you are is healthy?lol but im not a vampire either!

Interesting idea...im guessing inspiration was found in Blade...? maybe yes no lol i dont know thats what came to mind when i read it

1st stanza didn't have a rhyme scheme like the rest

Vampires and vampaneze,
walking the streets
disobeying the hellish rules
feasting on whomever it meets.

you change from singular to plural (first line and then the last line)

great story line though minor things wrong with it.....good job 4/5

Hehe, liked it! I have a little fixation on vampires, Im afraid, and I really liked this poem,.

Good Writing!
beth

The flow was a bit off and i found some forced rhymes....good story though....4/5

Ahhh!! another dark one!..
creepy!! lol but awesome!

Vampires scare me..lol