I am sorry I read the whole thing but there was no real plot the thought of Cancer eating away at him was a good one thought I can assaciate with that but you never really told me why I should be so heart broken for this kid. Every word was just surface writing and nothing really dug to a deeper meaning well. I know you will not like this but I have to give my honest opinion. Take care maybe your next will be better...

Awww this is really sad but good.

aww that poem was really good.
touching and full of emotion.
i liked it.
keep up the good work

This is a well writen poem. Its is so full of saddness and lack of hope it screems at you.

the reason why i only gave you a 4 is this.... the poem doesnt appeal to me for some reason.. its good, ill give you that.. but the rhyming is getting to me for some reason... i tend not to rhyme, so i tend not to like rhymes.. so maybe im just different but thats just me, keep up the good work... this seems like a poem from your heart or somewhere close so dont take what ive said too seriously... or serious at all
keep it up
amanda

very sad and touching poem william.
you did a great job.
wish you the best,
marjan

really touching. i live it